Tsunami
The ocean rose
As an abusive father's hand -
Rushing to the innocent -
Hand tearing out throat
Silencing any plea
A pounding into limp fish
There was no safety in the harbor
There was no safety in the harbor
The fishermen are weeping
Through the debris of death
posted by dthaase | 7:28 PM
1 Comments:
Hi Dan!
how was your holiday????
hopefully, we can connect sometime in February,
after I get my classes up and running again.
Brave of you to write about the disaster.
I like the tone.
I like the introduction of the "father,"
however, I have a hunch that you don't need to label him as "abusive," but can imply it,
as well as I have a yearning to see the "father" reintroduced at the ending,
to be shown once for all is the father truly
an indifferent abuser or not.
Here's my 2 cents worth. Keep the faith, brother,
hope to see you in Feb.
Bryan
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