poetry - n. 1: writing that formulates a concentrated imaginative awareness of experience in language chosen and arranged to create a specific emotional response through meaning, sound, and rythmn 2 a: a quality that stirs the imagination b: a quality of spontaneity and grace

Name: dthaase

Sunday, November 14, 2004

The Marionette

The children never noticed the hands above,
deftly moved,
surgical merriment
through manipulated sutures.
A meticulous operation,
a miraculous art:
the lifeless raised to life.


Blogger Bryan said...

Hey Dan,
I enjoy the consistent tone
of this poem, the consistent "medical" feel.
Plus, as I'll probably show you,
one of my favorite poems (of mine) dealt with marionnetes, though my teacher thought it was pap. I like the feel of "manipulated sutures" even though I'm not entirely clear what they are. I can't think of much constructive advice, other than possibly adding a "picture" of the marionette (or person)being raised, or attempting to stand on its awkward limbs.
See you Wed., perhaps!

5:26 PM  

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